CONCEPT IDEAS FEEDBACK

CONCEPT IDEA #2.

On the 11.01.22, we presented our concept ideas to our peers in order to recieve feedback from both Mike and others to improve and work on the details of our pitches.

 STUDENT FEEDBACK 

What psychological issues does the man have?

Now adding, post-research: Schizophrenia. 

(https://www.betterhealth.vic.gov.au/health/conditionsandtreatments/mental-illness-and-violence)

TEACHER FEEDBACK

There needs to be clear signifiers as to how the man is mentally ill - small details that are extremely disturbing within the first three shots and create tension. 

- Ragged Barbie dolls in the drawer of his vanity

- Writing the same words over and over in the journal, he flips through them initially and in scribbly, deranged handwriting disturbing things can be seen. Children's doodles. 

- When mouthwash is spat into the sink, blood can be seen in the liquid

- Playing contrapuntal music (most likely classical) 

- Voicemail can be heard when he checks his answer phone/machine once he wakes up asking where he has been and that his family are worried for him (mother's voice). Asking if he has taken his medication.

Make a list of enough activities that the man could be doing within his morning routine.

-  Shaving

- Mouthwash (could be blood in the liquid when spat out into the sink)

- Flossing/brushing teeth might take too long

- Brushing hair

- Cologne/deodorant 

- Writing in his journal. Sharpens his pencil beforehand 

- Smoking

- Stretching

- Drinking water 

- Turning off alarm (the sound of the alarm is the first thing introduced in a black screen)

- Watering succulents (rubbing the dirt in between his fingers)

- Making his bed (neatening out the creases etc.)

PERSONAL ADAPTATIONS 

To avoid cliches (post- editing introduction workshop):

- Removing the medication (pill) aspect of the sequence